Monochrome: His Favorite Shade of Gray - Comments

Awesome chapter! This reminds me of how I write. It's full of colourful vocabulary that you're putting to fabulous use! I loved the title, and the layout. This calls for an update. Don't give up on this, just plow on and it will do great things.

A very intriguing idea and let me say, your layout is perfect and draws a reader in. Keep going!

Okay, I try not to comment on layouts because everyone has their preference, but in this case, I feel obliged to let you know that your text is too small. I can barely read it. Other than that; you have a good layout ^-^ Also, you have pretty good grammar; I don't really see any mistakes after first looking at it, so that's a plus for you. I'm really sorry this is your first comment. This isn't my type of story; I'm sorry, but you're writing is good so keep up the good work!