The Accident - Comments

You really set the scene and the feelings, though if I may make a suggestion, when you get to traumatic parts, linger on them more, describe more feelings. For example: the body bag thing, you could have added a little more to help the reader feel the same way. (there is absolutely nothing wrong with what you did, I enjoy this story quite a bit. You are very detailed, but I feel this was a little fast and too short (because I loved it!) I hope to see something of yours published one day, subbed and recommended

This is a very intriguing story. I think your descriptions in it were very impressive because they were so flawless and detailed. The ending was perfectly fitting, and I hope to see more of your writing too. I applaud you for this, and kudos.