I'll Put Your Body to the Test With Mine - Comments

I read this over and over again because I love it so much! You should make another one-shot of them or continue a story! pleeasee(: *bats eyelashes*

Bitch got what she deserved! xD

This was amazing omg. I love smut when it has a story behind it rather than just sex and then it's over. I love your writing, you should defiantly write more!

omfg...i love it!

So dirty.. O__O
I like it. c;

this is so amazingly written damn!

@ TheFearOfFalling
Thank you but I already know the grammar mistakes I had made. Lol, sorry for it, ill go back and try to fix it but my computer has been messing up after the post. I also mixed bit and but at the end if you catch it. Again, I will try to fix it soon.

It was a pretty good one shot. Although you had some spelling errors that bothered me, and here they are.

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“Jaime! I said stop…” His laughing cease. I move closer to him and continue on not listening to him. I love messing with him. I’ve been friends with the guy for years. Since Elementary School. Love him to death. I hate that he has a girlfriend though. It’s not fair. She’s nothing but a whore. I’ve met her before. Stuck up, arrogant hoe. That’s how I see ir. I don’t think bad of her; It’s a known fact. I believe that Vic deserve someone that actually knows him. Someone that actually knows every loving detail about him. Like I do.

Couch, and chandeliers Also, was "You was right. . ." Grammatically wrong, on purpose?

“She left me. With other man’s baby..She cheated on me multiple times then got pregnant.” I looked at him to study his expression. Lost, hurt, lonely. He laugh without humor. “You was right, she’s a whore…I couldn’t wait to see her brilliant face. She asked me if I could come over to her LA place and said she had something to tell me and just couldn’t wait. I showed up, she had the door in tears. I sat on the couth under the chandlers. She said she’s having a baby and before I could cry, she’s leaving me just when I thought she was mine. I was going to propose to her but she’s running around thinking it’s okay to fuck other person when I’ve been honest and deep hearted to her!”

Morning?

The next more, I felt weak. Light weighted and lose. The bed was empty, no Vic. I sigh. He must had went out. I slug my way over to the shower to get clean off. Dry semen down my stomach and my legs. Scratch marks on my back. I step in the shower, having the hot water pour on me. I scrub the smell of sex away and wash away the stress of my body. After shampooing my hair with Vic hair wash, I dry myself off. I went back in the room to throw on my pajamas I threw off me last night. I went to the door to go back to my room-

Other than that, it was a good one shot. :3

~Pansy Xo

Its really good!! I like it a lot!!!

Oh my gosh, I loved your first chapter so much it was so good! And your theme is really good! :) And I'd love it if you'd read my book "Into The Redwoods We Go" and give me feedback! :) Keep up the good work

My god. It's amazing!