Til We See The Sun - Comments

billet-doux12 (100)

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@ memyselfndI
Thank you but I would just appreciate if you would message me about it. It is my story for that matter. And I am in the process of editing my story so thank you or helping me.

February 24th, 2013 at 01:36am

memyselfndI (100)

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@ billet-doux12
Comments are kinda were that kind of things are put, but whatever. Personal preference and all that.
Besides I've said all I felt needed to be said, so I shouldn't have anything more to say. Have fun.
Sorry for trying to help you get more readers, and whatnot.

February 23rd, 2013 at 10:06pm

billet-doux12 (100)

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@memyselfndI

Thank you for your comment. And I don't mean to sound rude and as much a I love contstructive criticism I really don't think it is nessesecary to post it on my stories. If it had problems I don't think I would have as many recommenders, readers and subscribers to this story. Thank you for thinking of my story but if you would have any further editing comments please message me an I would be more than happy to take it into consideration :)

February 23rd, 2013 at 09:13pm

memyselfndI (100)

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Spellcheck each chapter please, it's a good habit to get into. There aren't many mistakes, but your story could really go up a notch or two if they were fixed.
Also, try to keep your main characters emotions a little more consistent. In the first chapter, she goes from being this confident, amazing photographer to freaking out and worrying that she's got a job and needing her best friend beside her. Then all of a sudden she's being strict and stern with her friend? It's just a bit... All over the place. Pick a persona and stick to it until your character needs to change with the storyline

February 23rd, 2013 at 08:19pm