Pistol Whipped. - Comments

I'm here as a judge for the NC-17 Only contest.

I want to start off by saying that I really enjoyed how, even though this was smut, I felt like I really got to know the characters. Usually when there isn't much background information I find it difficult to understand or relate to the characters, but in this story I felt like you did a really good job of establishing the personalities of the characters and staying true to the characters through the entire thing. I also liked that it was established at the beginning that there was a past between Mel and Matt so it wasn't weird and out of character when the sex happened.

I did see a few errors throughout the story, and I wanted to point out the incorrect dialogue tags. At the beginning they were correct, and then suddenly they weren't. Shut up, Short Shit.” they all chorused should be Shut up, Short Shit,” they all chorused, with a comma before the quotation mark instead of a period.

Overall though, I thought you did a good job with this story. Thanks for entering!

This was so good. That was some effing hotness! I loved it good job!

Wow. A dominant, abusive Matt is so freaking sexy. I loved it so much! :) That got me a little horny, not gonna lie. It was very well written and I loved how she teased him at the beginning of the chapter. This was incredible and I'm very, very happy to have read it. :) Thank you so much for entering and great job. :D

Why is a dominant abusive Matt such a turn on?
Well written, my dear.

Holy shit, that was the best erotic stories I've read of yours yet! Great job! :)

FUCK THAT WAS HOT! Comment virginity- woop! So awesome, damn, I need to get Shadows into my bed...