The quote in the summary, And it was killing me inside. really makes me wonder about this one will be about. Feelings? Love? Hurt? What kind of feeling? You got me interested.
As for the actual chapter, I liked what you showed us in the first and paragraph and how you brought it home with the next finishing sentence. The only thing which I didn't qute like was when you repeated I was starting to forget so many times. Sometimes it works out nicely but not in this.
As for the actual chapter, I liked what you showed us in the first and paragraph and how you brought it home with the next finishing sentence. The only thing which I didn't qute like was when you repeated I was starting to forget so many times. Sometimes it works out nicely but not in this.
-Marian.