The Fiercest Battle - Comments

Thank you for commenting SpaceJunkie. I'm glad it kept you interested. Paragraphs are one of my many writing skills that need improving, though of course everything in general has room for improvement. I appreciate your advise and hope for the same when I release more writing :)

I like your introduction. I honestly didn't expect this to be so modern, but I was interested all the way through. My only suggestion is that maybe you could merge some of your little paragraphs right at the start into bigger ones. You don't want to sound fragmented.