One Look - Comments

@ Keep Swimming Nemo
Oh my, thank you so much!!! This one is tied to both one apology and Ready to Leap. The two short ones are basically the side stories of what's going on. It truly means a lot to me that you both enjoyed and commented :)

Ermahgerd. Okay, so I found this off of comment swap, and may I just say, I've fallen in love. I really like your writing style, and this plot. Both are very unique and good, and...stuff. Just saying, this is an incredible story. Good job!

@ Grotesque.
Nah, it's an original piece written for a prompt. Thanks for the compliments and the comment, sweets.

Comment Swap
Hi!

I don't know much of this story since it seems to be a fan fiction of some sort (forgive me if I'm wrong, didn't see which contest it was entered in for), but that honestly doesn't even matter. I really loved the concept of this. I wonder why this doesn't have more recs or comments! It's brilliant and I hope you get more recognition for this!

@ Skylight Madness
Thank you so much for the comment. I wrote this for a non-dialogue contest, so that's why there wasn't any in it. I know there were a lot of characters, hehe. It's related to another story of mine. Kind of a random glimpse into his view on things.
I'm really glad you enjoyed it (: (: (:

Okay, I don't see why there aren't any comments on this. I myself was brought by the lovely comment swap section but I'm pretty happy about it.

Reading the first chapter was very confusing, I felt like there were just so many girls being thrown in here and there and I couldn't tell which girl was doing what. I would suggest possibly adding dialogue to break it all up or maybe try another way to make it clear on who's doing what.

It seems that this a story without dialogue but I think it would add to it. I don't know, that's just all I could think to suggest. Other than that, your story is very well written and I'm glad that I was brought to it (: