Fated to Love You - Comments

This reads like a published novel. There are no grammar/spelling errors that I could see, and every character is fleshed out. I only had time to read the first four chapters but I’m definitely going to read more, since it’s getting so tragic and suspenseful. X”D Even in the first few chapters you established Abigail’s life well enough that it hurts to imagine the setting without her. Great job! :)

FlyawayGirl:

Thank you very much! ^^ Most people are scared away by the longer chapters, but I had a novel sized story in mind when I started this, so I figured longer was appropriate. ^^

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Beautiful layout! Absolutely perfection! The summary is perfection as well. It's small, simple, and makes me already want to read on. The chapters are long which I like! I've come across so many stories with short dinky chapters and it's honestly the most annoying thing. <.< I look at the chapters and smile knowing that I have a lot to read ! :) Absolutely beautiful and perfect in every single way. Marvelous. xoxo

First off, your layout, my gosh! that is beautiful! Your summary is great. I always have trouble with the summary, I don't know how to make them quite as gripping as yours. Yours is perfect. Now, your writing style is impressive. You are very descriptive and exact. From the very first paragraph I enjoyed this. You are very talented. Congratulations on a good story.

I was bought here through comment swap.
I really like the summery I'd made me want to read. I really like the description but I did find myself starting to scan the last of each chapter. The chapters are possible to long for my taste of the paragraphs need more spacing. I like the plot and the characters.

@Jaii: Thanks, and okay.

@ WriterNotAFighter
your name is very cute..(had to comment on it lol) and the layout is borrowed so I have no idea (_ _ll) sorry I'm no help xp

How was the banner made on the layout? It is marvelous.

How was the banner made on the layout? It is marvelous.

How was the banner made on the layout? It is marvelous.

I found this through comment swap! You have some slight grammar mistakes, like in the second chapter you refer to the cafe as -insert name here- and unless im mistaken and its name that :) The only major thing I would say is that the chapters are pretty long. I found myself skimming the chapters because it became hard to focus on it. Just remember that the first couple chapters are supposed to sell your story to the reader. Trim a few details here and there that aren't really necessary, but thats just my opinion :) The plot was really interesting though! Good luck with your writing

@ partyhostile.
thank you for your comment ^^ I'm glad you enjoyed it :) I'm hoping its around the length of a novel when complete, so the chapters will make more sense then xp, but I will consider posting them in more parts so they appear less daunting to the reader ^^ thank you again.

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I like this. The summary drew me in instantly and I just loved it. It's nothing I'd read, but I enjoyed it. My only complaint is the chapters, they're a bit too long for my taste, but that doesn't mean you're not a good author. I agree with all of the other comments, you've done a fantastic job at this!

@ Jaii
Haha Well honesty is always a good thing, no?

@ Anonnyer
Thank you for your comment ^^ and honesty lol xp

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This is a great story. Most certainly not the type I prefer to read, I'll have to be honest. But it was quite intriguing, I have to admit that. Other than that, I pretty much agree with all the other comments.

@ The Lovecraft
Thank you for your comment, I'm glad that you enjoyed the first chapter :D I'm actually hoping that my story reaches the length of a novel once it is completed ^^ but perhaps i should start posting each chapter in sections ^^ thank you for the suggestion~

@ Human Shapeshifter
Thank you for your comment and your suggestions ^^

@ MrBlackwaterPark
Thank you for taking the time to read my story and for your comment ^^

Well this is refreshing! I'm actually coming back to Mibba after a longlonglong time, but your story is both very unusual and of very good quality!

I like the awesomely unique elements - the pastry-related plotline, the younger love interest, it's all absolutely awesome. The ending has me worried and I wish I had time right now to read more.

Just one very little remark, not even a "negative" - the chapter is a bit too long, I think. If this were a book, it wouldn't be an issue, but for a story in this form, it may be inconvenient to come back to it if one doesn't have time to read it in its entirety.

Overall, a fantastic job!