Shit, I'm sorry that it keeps taking so long for me to update. I hate people who write fics that I'm reading like that. I'm going to do my best to fix that; guys I am so sorry. </3
@ SquiddyTheMouse I love the fact that you always are the first person to comment after updates. You are the main reason right now that I keep writing.
@ SquiddyTheMouse Haha, I might actually use some of it. Or all of it, just, in different orders. Om fg. This is fab. You're fabulous with your ideas and stuff. <3
@ vy_marie You could make it so that Gerard has pale skin because he's actually some mythical creature, and he tells Frank and Frank's okay with it. Frank decides to tell his parents that he's now gay and with Gerard, but his parents don't accept it and tell him that he's no longer welcome in their house, then Gerard tells Frank to move in with him after they finish school and Frank accepts. Gerard could then turn Frank into whatever creature he is. After that, perhaps Gerard gets a job, to earn some money and they hardly ever see each other, and Frank thinks that Gee's cheating on him, but really, Gerard's getting some money together to buy Frank an engagement ring so that he can propose. Frank accepts his proposal and they get married, and they invite Franks parents to the wedding. Franks parents could be cunts at the wedding and try to fuck things up, but it doesn't work and everyone ends up hating them. Frank and Gee could then adopt/use a surrogate to have a child or two and they live together for the rest of eternity.
They're both in third person, if I missed anything, they were, like, thoughts. But, I'll make sure to check that and stuff. Also, I'm pretty sure that I switch tenses a lot, but, I've always had trouble staying in the same tense. Haha. And, by there won't be fluff I mean, like, the stories where all they do is kiss eachother on the noses, or this and that. I find those stories unsatisfying, because.... I dunno. I just do. But thank you for the criticism and compliments.
I like it, but would you accept some constructive criticism? You wrote chapter 2 (and possibly chapter 1, I'm not sure) In third person, but then you had essences of 'we' or 'me' mentioned, which are from first person. It makes it unclear as to what you're trying to achieve with the chapter, because as a reader I didn't know who was talking. Like, at first, I thought it was Frank maybe over-hearing the conversation? Because in First person you wouldn't say that, for example if I was Gerard, it would be "I said" not "Gerard said". Also, "fluff" is cute things, and by what I've read so far, I think your story will have "fluff". Besides that, I couldn't find anything else that wasn't good. (:
Yay thank you <3