Secrets - Comments

@outthewindow thanks so much for the tips, I'll be sure to do that, I think it was mainly to get across the characters.

Wee! Comment swap time! For this being your first fanfiction, it's not too bad. There's a few suggestions I can me to you though. Try a little less dialogue and a bit more description. Your chapters are very dialogue driven, and it’s nice to get a bit of closer look at the settings and the characters feelings. Also, it’s totally cool for authors to write from different points of view, but you should be sure to do it sparingly. It’s a great skill to be able to balance those pov’s well. And this isn’t really writing related, but I find that people are more likely to read your story if you have a nice custom layout. So, just keep working at it and I’m sure you’ll do great.