October Rain - Comments

Okay well. Full Honest Review time.

Okay so.. When I started reading this story, I wasn't too sure what I was getting into. I honestly didn't think I was going to like it. Within the first chapter or two though, my opinion turned around completely. It's a fairly interesting idea that you have there!

When things are in italics, does that mean it's in someone's mind? Or is it just when Micheal is talking? Also, is Micheal only talking to Harmony in her mind? Or is he talking aloud too? I couldn't really tell...

While I do like your layout, you should make the words a smaller font and maybe not bright white.. Maybe a lighter gray so it doesn't strain eyes as much..? (If you're wanting to make it look like the chapter is longer than it really is, try making the width smaller, instead of larger words. Sorta like what I did for my story. example(I'm not trying to promote my story. Just sayin lol)) That is up to you though. haha :)

I'm hoping you update this story again sometime soon. I'm definitely going to read it :)

This is good!

YES!!!!
and we have...AN UPDATE

duuude update

update update update update !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

This was great!!!So happy you updated!!!Michael is so incredibly sweet that it makes me swoon!Ugh just so adorable!I love it!And I love it that they have a bond!I can't wait to see how their bond blossoms!! Looking forward to many more chapters!Please update soon!!! Love it <3

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Just throwing this out there PLEASE update lol.Ik this is my second comment,but I love Harmony and I'm really liking Michael!And OMG my weakness, VAMPIRES!Makes the story even more kick ass!Ugh you are such a terrifix writer.I'm dying for the next installment.Please update as soon as you can.I'll be waiting....But not in a creepy way LOL

This is fucking fantastic!I love it so much and I looove the title! Another great story from an amazing author!!Please update soon!I need more!!Subscribing now!So excited,I can't wait!

Woooow! Seems pretty amazing so far! Can't wait until I read more so please update soon :)

Hey! I like this so far! You're a really good writer. A real easy style which is something I really like. It doesn't sound forced & flows nicely.

There were two little technical things I noticed though. When you write ""Words words words." she said ", there needs to be a comma instead of that period. Example: ""Words words words," she said". See, the "she" is lower case and there's a comma since the sentence isn't over! No big deal, just one of my pet peeves.

The other little thing I noticed was that you accident skip a few spaces before the beginning of a new sentence. Again, no big deal, just something that would make it easier to read (for me anyways, I get distracted by those things because I'm a weirdo!) (:

But I like it overall, I was actually looking for a vampire story earlier! So this was great timing! Definitely subscribing.

I can already tell this is going to be a GREAT story :D You have a very well put together writing style :)