We'll Both Catch Fire on Words of Desire - Comments

I actually think this story has a great beginning. It hooked me fro the start, and had this story been longer it would have been a joy to read. I see another comment telling you to lengthen the chapters, but if you plan on expanding this story, I don't think that will be necessary. I think the length was long enough to keep me informed, but concise enough to keep me interested. I think this is great!

Any time ! You only have to ask if you want me to read anything :) I'll help out where I can, you should keep writing you have amazing plot ideas :)

@ missinvisible2013
Thank you for reading all of my stories pretty much. I've now been inspired to look back over them, edit them, and start working once again.

Loving the plot of this story :) suspense is always a good thing when it comes to writing stories (in my opinion)

It's an interesting plot with lots of mysteries to be unraveled. I think you could improve your chapters and lengthen them up a bit if you add some details here and there. It's a good start though! The more you work on them, the better they become. :] But keep writing! I'd love to see where you go with this story.

this story definitely has a good concept to it. I like the overall plot so far but sometimes your sentences seem to not sound right when reading it. Like i have to re-read the sentences a couple times over in my head. Also i think you might have jumped into the main part of the story a little to quick. I see where you tried to make a little character development but I think we should have have a beter mental thought of the characters. Let us feel kate better to really want to know what happens to her. Hope im not saying nothing to harsh or too much but like i said mostly its okay :)

(i'm from comment swap)

This story needs to be proofread. I think you need a stronger build-up to the events of the story. There is only a little suspense, but the plot seems quite interesting! I'd like to see how this comes along.

@ bright as fire.
thanks. I will go back and change those right away.

Hey, I'm from the Comment Swap.
Right off the bat I got kind of a bad impression with this story. In the description there are typos and Kate isn't always capitalized as it should be. The grammar in the chapters isn't perfect either--maybe read it out loud before posting so you catch the errors? I might even suggest getting someone on Mibba to help proofread your work.
Your descriptions are good despite the grammatical errors and it seems like you have an interesting plot, which is really the most important. The reason I stress the boring nit-picky errors is that they take away from your story. Good luck! Keep it up!

First comment! Oh yeah!! Lol =p
Okay, well firstly, i love the suspence! I cant wait to see what really happens. So many questions left unanswered, which is good! Because that means more details in the chapters to come! I will be looking forward to seeing how the main characters met and their background. Also to see what this top secret stuff is all about and how he had the job and so forth. Will be also wondering if there will be more romantic pop ups between different characters and not just the two! Cant wait to see more discrption on both characters and where they are from, likei said, pretty much just background information. =)
Cant wait for more!! First comment and another subscriber!!