Luka - Comments

This was lovely.

The story/fable/fairytale was interesting - it seemed to be a mix of the Jungle Book (Mowgli) and Peter Pan. I love the narrative - told like a true bedtime story. I especially love how you showed him pulling away/growing distant from humanity, I think that was a really nice touch.

I quite like this. It's been one of the few things on Mibba I've actually felt compelled to read rather than skim, and the length is just right. This only confirms my theory that you're improving fast. Can't wait to see how good you are when you're my age. Well done.

@ sainted swan
I fixed the mistake and I'm very glad you enjoyed it!

Ah, my weaknesses in a short story. A cute boy, beautiful colors (in the banner, holy shit), disney-related (somewhat), a boy named Luka, and wolves. The vocabulary in this story was strong and you did such a great job on the detail. I could picture things here and there, but I still could imagine the whole story like it happened because of that. I liked Luka's personality; he was strong, kind and pure. I liked how he wanted to be pure and free just like the wolves.

There was a single part where you repeated "him" twice. And, if perchance you don't see him him, the legends say that he is the first wolf to howl when a young boy enters the forest,

But seriously, urgh, it was beautiful and it sounded like a true legend. I just had to recommend it to everyone. This story is definitely one of my favorites from you.

Thank you so much for taking the time to write a story just for me, making a thread just for me, and wishing me "happy birthday". I appreciate it.

This is awesome!! I love it!! And it doesn't hurt that the guy in the banner is hot lol...LOVED IT!! :)