Nobody's Home. - Comments

Oh my gosh, the last line made me go crazy!
Youve got to update soon, I need to see more omfg

Wow, I am totally intrigued by this so far, I cant wait to read more. I simply love the whole idea of him being a dark character and her being his 'prey'. more please!!!!!
Plus, him mouthing "your mine now" at her left me feeling funny:P UPDATE!

I'm agreeing with everything in the last comment, except for the part about her parents moving fast just because they're basically hiring him to work for them, and you don't usually take a while to get to know the person. I also thought the summary was a pretty good way to draw someone in because summaries are so hard to make interesting. But this is definitely interesting, and I'm so freaking curious about what's in his garage. Everything about this is fantastic, especially since it is a newer fic and first chapters are rarely ever as great as this one was. Can't wait to see where this goes. :)

I'm procrastinating from my NaNoWriMo novel, and this one caught my eye as I clicked onto the story page. I don't know why, but I decided to read it. And this might sound stupid, but I know your username from somewhere. I think I'm reading another of your stories. I'll have to check.

Anyway, I think this was a strong start to what's promising to be a very interesting story. I got chills creeping down my spine when they were staring at each other, and then when he mouthed those words. I'm surprised it took her so long to draw the curtains. I suppose her show of dominance is one of the things that drew him to her so quickly.

I feel like her parents moved in a bit fast with him, though. It might have been better for them to get to know him for a few weeks, or days at least, before deciding that he could be the one to finish their basement. But that's just my opinion.

I suppose I should get back to work now. Can't wait to see what you do with this. ;)