Oh my freaking lord!!!! This chapter was so amazing. I loved it, everything happened seamlessly and nothing felt forced. My emotions moved and my heart clenched. This was amazing, I can't wait to read more!!!
I'm still absolutely astounded! This is wonderful! I have every reaction I would reading an actual book. Eloquent words, plot twists, humor; it has it all. Please keep up the work. I look forward to reading more.
This story is lovely. Your writing flows so effortlessly, and it is so easy to read, as you have the right balance of description and dialogue. I loved this line in Chapter 6, "And for one single moment, life was easy." It was so simple, and yet beautiful Your charcterisation is also really good. Especially of Hayley, she seems so realistic - she actally really reminds me of someone I know!
I don't know why but when I read this line: "He gave a sardonic snort, as if he was thinking about some private joke that only he was in on." I t reminded me of a joke my brother told me. It goes like this. "So you call dominoes pizza and ask for pizza huts number"Haha :)