A Soldier's Goodbye. - Comments

Holy cheap that was amazing!!!!!!

Wow this was absolutely amazing! loved it! There is so much emotion within the words you use and it just adds so much to the story!

I think you did an excellent job of setting up the scene and the characters. Many writes just write shut for smut, but you have it a back story and made it so much more sweet. The ending mad me tearing up. It was so sad. But I'm glad he finally came back for her.

It's hard for me to out into words how awesome you write. I love the detail you give everything. You write about little things that really set it apart differently than any other story I know. Just amazing.

Very few stories I have read were beautifully written and plotted, and this is one of them. It was just perfect and I wish there was more! Left me in tears at the end. It is way too early for me to start crying....

I will comment on this better when I am more awake, but what I will say for now is:
This was so beautiful. I thoroughly enjoyed reading this not just for the sex [because I did enjoy reading that] but also for the emotional quality that you put into it. Even though I have never experienced a soldier's goodbye, I could still feel it just as strong as if I had.

The beginning was a tad slow, but it picked up and at the end I was in tears. [I might have been full out crying if family wasn't out here.]

This was a wonderfully written story and I have no criticisms that I can figure out at the moment. I will give a better comment later when brain is functioning correctly.

@ spikeskyogirl
Unfortunately, no, I can't say that I have, but after completing my current Captain story (whenever that may be), I'm planning on creating a story with him and a new character during that time. (:

Ever thinking of making this into a full story?

@ spikeskyogirl
Thank you for the comment! I'm glad you liked it! :)

Beautiful, im crying my eyes out!

@ littlegirlbri
It was a pleasure to write this for you, and to be honest, it's one of my favorite one-shots that I've ever written, so thank you for allowing me to write this. (:
I'm delighted that you enjoyed it and that you thought the layout was nice. I really did try my best with this!
I'm very sorry that there were some grammatical errors, when I posted this it was in the wee hours of the morning so I guess I couldn't find every mistake I wrote. :/ I'll have to go back and try to find them all.
Thanks again and I'm so glad that you liked it!!

So, as I've already told you, this was something that instantly reminded me of my late friend, Roy. I did read it, and now I am commenting on it.

It was absolutely wonderful, every little detail. The layout is exceptional and the writing is just beautiful. I love how the letter is the summary - that alone was enough to make my eyes well up. The actual chapter was pretty perfect. There were few mistakes, and it's one of the longest one-shots I've read. Thank you so, so much for writing this for me. I'm actually considering putting it to print to keep it forever.

@ Oliver Queen
Thank you for the comment! It's very much appreciated and I'm very glad that you liked it! :D
I'm so sorry that it made you cry, though! D: Lol

And then I cried.
This was perfect, and I may or may not have read their love scene more than once...
>_> Anyways, great job! I hate that there isn't a favorite button! (:

@ Overflowing Ashtray
Thank you, I'm very happy that you enjoyed it! :)
I feel like I'm very awkward at writing sex so I'm glad it was well written. (x
Yeah, unfortunately Annalise did pass away at the end. I wasn't sure how to convey that, but I tried my best.
Thanks so much for the comment!!

Ahh
I wasn’t emotionally prepared for this! I feel like I did when I first watched The English Patient, but at least here there was a happy ending! So . . . in my mind, Steve was frozen for fifty years instead of the seventy-something he actually was, and Annalise’s fifty-one year old son is also his. That is now officially canon.
That love scene was beautifully written and so hot.
My face was honestly just mere inches from my laptop lol
And the ending! Be still my heart! Perfection!
But . . . I have a question, I don’t know if my mind’s properly functioning or if I'm just making stuff up.
Did she die after he gave her his heart? I feel like the “a short final breath” meant she died but then I was like, what if that was the final breath of crying, and either way it was beautiful, and emotional :D