The Girl Who Remembered - Comments

I really liked the beginning, and I love Dr. Who. I'm just wondering which Doctor it is, unless I missed something. I'm not going to nitpick grammar, spelling, or anything like that because that can be reserved for another draft. Maybe you could expand the flashback, put a separator between " ... come crashing down on them" and the next paragraph instead of italicizing it if you expand it. Drag out the scene a little bit to make the parting a little more bittersweet, perhaps. Although, as it is, I do like it.

I loved it! If you have time, would you maybe consider extending it? I loved the Sherlock reference, 221B Baker Street!

I found this lovely story via comment swap. 

Anyway, oh my God! Can I just say I love the chemistry between Doctor and Viola? By the way I've never actually watched the show, but I really loved this.

The writing style was simple, it didn't leave me scratching my head because I didn't understand a word, it was short and simple. Also, mibba sometimes has a habit of having a shit-ton of smut, and it's always refreshing reading a story that doesn't center around it.

So bravo! Because of you I might actually start getting around to watching Doctor Who! 

And I really do enjoy happy endings, this little one-shot was perfection, darling. =]

Great!! Loved this (:

Well seeing as I know nothing about Dr. Who I was thoroughly confused. Still, this was very well written and I couldn't find much wrong with it. The plot seems very interesting, even for someone with no background knowledge like me.

@ coeur.
Thank you so much! I wrote it all on my phone, so I'll probably edit it on Monday. :)
And I'm still debating on whether to extend it.

Oh my Jesus this is just perfect. In all honesty, if you go on with this, please do the rest justice. It'd be nice to come back and read the next chapter and have it be just as good as this one. Other than the minor grammatical errors with your quotation marks and sentence flow and whatnot, I like your idea, it's awesome... And romantic. You should try and get a layout in there too, there is a lot of cool ways youncan make them with this kind of story.

Keep up the good work and I hope you go on with this soon.

Well your summary made me want to read it. It was short yet perfect. Well, I didn’t see the Doctor Who fanfiction part coming. Nice surprise. I like this. I seriously cannot wait to read more. Please update soon! One thing:

"Doctor, no! I can't leave you. I need you." She hurried, her voice becoming thick. "Please, do something. I don't want to go. I don't want to be normal. I want to be with you. Please, Doctor." She begged, grasping his hands as the tears shed down her cheeks.

When you are finishing a bit of dialogue that doesn’t end with a question mark or exclamation point you should put a comma between the last word and the quotation mark, but only if you are going to put something like "she said" "he did" things like that. If you are putting just as what that person said and nothing after the statement then a period is what you use. Other than that good job!