I Am Vengeance - Comments

Really like it! Update soon, maybe?????

Oh man! You even have Nightwing in this! I really love you right now, you know that right? I am definitely excited about this story! So please update soon and I just cannot wait how this story will unfold!

By the way you really had me biting my nails!

There was no need to sniff the air with the foul odor of fish and polluted river water invading her senses.

I loved that line because if anyone that lives near a beach or has been by the beach during low tide knows that smell, and seriously is a foul smell, and it leaves a bad taste in your mouth.

All the while Batman simply rolled his eyes as at the two young adults.

That is so Bruce/Batman that I am laughing at the sheer mental image. I really adore the way you write, also I am glad that you are updating again and I honestly can not wait for the next chapter.

P.s. I hope you passed all your exams (idky I wrote fails) and did amazing at school!

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Jason was nowhere to be found, and once again, he'd failed the one person he shouldn't have

You have filled me with feels, and that last part just hurt so much! I've seen Under the Red Hood, that movie really pulled at my heart strings, and so did this story. Good job! You've gained a subscriber and a recommendation. =]

I'm already in love with this. Under the Red Hood is possibly one of my favorite animated Batman movies so reading a fanfic about Jason Todd makes me so happy! Can't wait to see where this goes.

Grammar errors I noticed.

White and barely visible(,) a sliver of light from the moon shined through a small break in the storm clouds.

In the main city(,) few dared to roam the streets,

Across town(,) in a large mansion(,) the kitchen light turned on blinding the occupant.

I just noticed a few missing commas throughout the story, so that's something you might want to look over.

Story

I thought the description in the first paragraph was really nice. That's usually what I like to see first in a story, because it reels me in, so good job with that! I thought the breakfast conversation was a little bit boring, but you made up for it with the drama with the Joker! It was nice to see an appearance from him early on in the story. The end of the chapter was really great and I loved all the tension between the Joker and Bruce! It was definitely my favorite part of this story, so far! Overall, great job and I really hope you keep writing this story!