Red Knights, White Knights - Comments

Hey girlie :) At first I was a little out of my comfort zone, but I ended up really enjoying this, and a lot of it as to do with the fact that your writing, is really incredible. I loved the way you developed your characters, it makes it interesting and they're all very easy to like.

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I liked this, I love this kind of story, so I was delighted when I realized what it was based on. Boy are there some tempers in there, but I liked that. Your characters are likable and well developed and your descriptions are good. Like some readers have said though, keep your words in the same tense. Good job!

LOVE IT! Pleeeeeeasee tell me you will continue it! Pleeeeaseee! =p I really like this story because it takes back in the old days, and leaves me wanting for more...obviously! =p lol, but pleeeaseeee! Really need to know what happens!

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This is the first story about werewolves I've read on Mibba, so it definitely caught my eye. Lacie seems to have a temper, but that's what creates her character. Not a lot of mistakes, just like what boyking said: keeping the wording in the correct tense. Don't feel bad though, I still have that problem. :P

As for the layout... it may be simple, but I like it. Especially the wolf in the background.

Can't wait to read more!

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Chapter one you wrote queue instead of cue...overall I'M IN LOVE WITH THIS!! Will definitely recommend and subscribe. Update soon. Haven't really read much on werewolves, except twilight really and that was mostly vampires so this should be really interesting. Can not wait to see how this is all going to work out....like the twist that's going to happen. Your writing style is just fabulous as well :) x

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sorry it took so long but now that I've read it all i can say is whoa! this isn't some Cheesy werewolf story this is legit cool!
Great detail and action i guess lol i don't know how to explain it, Lacie seems cool though she has a temper, i like how you make her not completely likable but good enough that people will still want to read. It's good to read from the point of view from someone different from yourself good job!

reading about werewolves is something i've definitely never done before, but your story seems different than most on this site. the description makes it a nice read and you have a talent for writing! i saw a few mistakes in the sense of keep the wording in the correct tense, sometimes having things in present and then in past tense. other than that, good luck with your story!

Ahh, a werewolf story :) I love to read these, and yours was quite refreshing to indulge in, and if I missed any mistakes, they don't really take away from the storyline, anyhow.

Beautiful! :)

this is a story about werewolves. that is cool, but obviously, has been done before. In my opinion what you need is some unique twist to the werewolf tale that will invoke in the reader a sense that these are "your" creations, this will also give you a greater degree of creative license

*comment swap* I really like this. Honestly I'm not a big fan of werewolves but the way you write makes it really easy to get into this. You're so descriptive and I can really picture the story playing along in my head. I want to read more. I'm subscribing :)

oh wow, I loved this. the description you make is fantastic.

"I dug my claws into the loose ground and slid to a halt, making some snow drift off the edge. Smoke rose from the village chimneys and people bustled around with purpose as they hid behind their knitted coats and scarves below."

that part was just beautiful to me for some reason - I could really picture it perfectly in my mind. I'm really excited to see where you go with this - it seems like an interesting story and I want to know more about the plot! update soon!