Sold My Soul to the Devil Himself - Comments

  • CourageKeeper

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    show shit thats intense.
    I wish there were more to it but i like it (:
    January 24th, 2013 at 08:56am
  • Thingtastic

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    Contest Judging Comment:
    Originality: 6/10
    The story is really to vague to be original and I'm only really giving you points for the band thing and the form of the devil.
    Character Development: 1/10
    Well there was no character development, there were no character relationships, no descriptive and solid reactions. Honestly if you had taken a bit more time, this could have been a better story.
    Plot: 1/10
    Once again, there wasn't enough description or story elements to give it a good plot. The story escalated quickly. You didn't explain how or why, Danny's friends were lying injured and naked in a crop circle.
    Grammar/ Spelling: You had a few errors and you switched from past tense to present tense at some point.
    The story doesn't seem much like one shot material and you left a lot unexplained.

    You started with 50 points and ended with 54. Check the contest page on December 20th to see if you won.
    December 19th, 2012 at 04:26am