At Your Service. - Comments

I really like the story its really good. I have a feeling that corey is going to either fuck up soon though, I hope you update soon.

Is it wrong that I'm mad that her and Corey made up lol. I dont' like Corey, Brian all the way!!! haha. Mmm, bad Ashley, staring at Brian like that but I can't blame her because fuck I would be too. Just the images of his shirtless chest, sweat running down his body as he worked out just whew! I'm wet all over again just thinking about, I just might of had to take him right then lol. Well that lunch "date" was awkward. OH MY GOD! I LOVED HOW YOU ADDED THE PINK IS THE NEW BLACK THING!! That made me think of that video, it is fucking hilarious. I love Brian <3 Mm, his accent would most definitely turn me on. He can say things in my ear with that accent while his cock is ramming in and out of me ;) I really like this, you need to update soon. I want Brian sex still!

NOOOOO!!! I was hoping for Brian sex :( lol. I know, it's too early for that but still. Grr, they didn't even really talk about their issues, she just gave him a blow job that's all. No just no. Everything is not all fine and dandy, I bet the next day they'll be at each other's throats all over again. Anyways, I think Carly is awesome though and I'm glad that she was understanding about Ashley going out with the guys when they were supposed to hangout. Mm, Chinese food, yep she can be forgiven haha. Loved this, except for the Corey part, didn't like that. GIVE ME BRIAN SEX SOON OR ELSE!! LOL.

Aww I love her and Matt's frienship, it's so sweet. Let's get this party started! Get the drinks lol. Of course, as soon as Jimmy and Johnny are shitfaced they start acting crazy, I could totally see it too. You gotta love those boys though. Now Ashley's wasted, now things are really about to go down. They're dancing, they're dancing and now it's getting steamy as sexual tension arises. God, how could she have rejected him, I mean come on he is so fucking sexy. If I were her I would've given in to him no questions asked because he's Synyster Fucking Gates! haha. I understand her reasonings though, she does have a boyfriend and even if he does cheat on her she doesn't need to stoop down to his level. I think Brian went a little too far, pointing out the fact that he cheated on her just to get what he wanted, that was messed up. I also get that she doesn't want to seem easy and she is his personal trainer after all so it would be awkward but still, it's Synyster Fucking Gates, just gahh!! Love this!

So, this story caught my interest as well. It wasn't what I expected but I liked this. I wouldn't mind being Brian's personal trainer, but I probably wouldn't be able to stay professional for long, I mean look at that man, just whew! Corey, you're an ass and I don't like you. Leave him Ashley and get with Brian, he's way better than him anyways. I love how she was so awkward around him, that would so be me lol. What? Just a date? I want it to be a fucking orgy! I mean come on, who wouldn't want to have an orgy with five sexy men? I know I would lol. Yes, she should go out with them and have some fun, get her mind off her asshole of a boyfriend. I like this so far and am definitely subscribing. I'm going to go read the next chapter now.

How could she turn down Brian? Like hello...he's gorgeous as hell! lol

Just read chapter 1 and I am anxious to read more! I like that Ashley is his personal trainer. I'm sure that can make for some pretty comprising positions! (Sorry it took me so long to read and comment this week was hell)

Well that must have been very awkward. I'm glad to see this story back in action.

Great story, i hope you'll update soon x) ! Bye!

Yay!!! More updates!!!!

Wow she turned him down and made up with Corey?!?! I didn't see either of those things happening. I'm liking this so far...

why would she turn him down!? wow. talk about being a rule follower but alright i like this story keep it up :)

Hey! Me again :) loving where the story is going. It's cool to see you took my advice on board. I felt it read a lot better this time. Just don't forget about your punctuation. Commas are a pain in the ass but unfortunately we need them haha. Anyways, it's looking good. Keep it up :)

I love how you open with dialogue, for some reason that always tends to draw me in. The only thing I wasn't sure about was that you seemed to start most of your sentences with "I". Just try to mix it up a little bit, change a sentence around a bit.
For example, instead of "I turned to face Matt and nodded" you could have written, "Turning to face Matt, I nodded"
Your choice though, that might just be me.
Other than that I really like the story and it's a bit different to what I've read before (and I've read a lot of Avenged Sevenfold fics).
Looking forward to the next chapter!