This story is so gripping! The concept that it starts off with is instantly pulling, with the idea of Zach suddenly turning up after being missing for years, and it made me so curious that I couldn't help but read on. What I read is even better. The imagery and description the you use in this is wonderful - I can put myself directly into Zach's shoes when he relives the memory of him being in the boxing/wrestling ring. It's just so well written and so compelling. An instant recommend and subscribe. Keep up the good work! :D :D
I just finished the first chapter and I find it so weird that they thought their son was dead after three years, I mean I know the first 48 hours is normally means the chances are extremely slim but so many parents never give up hope until many years later. Well I'm off to read the rest, I just wanted to point out my shock.
Comment swap I love this story. At first i thought that it isnt my type of stpry however the way you have made a great sense of mystery is fantastic. Your characterisation is great and I couldnt see any spelling or grammar mistakes which is even better. I have recommended it as well because the plot is great
When I first started reading this I thought "Arrow" (That show on TV.) But this is nothing like it, and I like that. The descriptions work real well, I actually can picture what the room looks like. The only thing I would suggest though is to work on describing what they're feeling more, don't be afraid to go in to detail about it. Also, I'm sure you already know because of other comments, but the layout cuts off words and I had to switch to the default layout.
Hi! Comment swap brought me here, and I have to say, I'm pleasantly surprised! This reminds me of some dramatic series you might see on TV. I think it'll take a delicate hand to keep up with the quality of this story and make it believable, but based on what I've read so far, you can certainly do it. This is a nice change of pace from what we usually see on this site. I guess the one thing I can suggest is to keep your characters' reactions as realistic as possible. What would a mother do in this situation? I don't think she'd be that concerned about her mascara running on the ride home from the hospital, but that's just me nit-picking. You picked a great, interesting way to start, so I can't wait to see where this is going!
Hi! Comment swap brought me here, this story seems like it's going to be ridiculously good. I'm super intrigued by it. However, I already feel like I've missed half of the story I'm not sure what's going on, at all. I would suggest adding more detail about the setting and about the past. In the very beginning I didn't even know that they were talking to a doctor until the very end. But please continue! I'll be subscribing to find out what happens!