WHO THE FUCK IS THE DAD? FUCK!!!!!!! KELLIN OR VIC? MOTHER FUCKKKKKK. TELLLLLL MEEEEEEEEEEEEEE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
June 24th, 2013 at 06:50am
I agree. It's not bad but check the grammer a bit. Work on adding dimension
- X13XThePurpleEscape:
- I like the story but I feel it jumps around a lot. And I felt like its very redundant. I really like it. Maybe get more inside kellin. Or Kyle's head. Give it some emotion