Thanks
November 20th, 2012 at 11:53pm
You, uh, made a few spelling mistakes, its a tad repetitive in the beginning, and you're overwhelming me with character development as well in the beginning. Slow it down, I don't think anyone would be writing about all the bad stuff just yet. Either that, or Loki just seems to be the type of person who's in denial.
But you get my eternal gratefulness for being the fourth or fifth person on Mibba to post a Thunderfrost/Thorki story. We need more of it.
Just trying to help you improve your writing, don't take it the wrong way.