Treating Tatum - Comments

i really like this story! i'm just curious when will tatum finally like, speak! update soon!

This story is really really REALLY good. I hope you don’t stop writing because I really want to keep reading! Your layout is absolutely beautiful. I like the ocean with the girl because the ocean is showing purity… At least that’s what I think. You’re a really good writer and I look forward to reading some of your other stories if you have any. I think you would be interested in one of my stories maybe! The only thing I do want to say about your writing is you might want to proofread from time to time. There are a few spelling and grammar errors. When I write my stories, I copy and paste the chapters into Microsoft Word so I can see spellings errors and such. It really does help! Other than that, this story is fantastic and I’m really glad I found it!

I LOVE IT I LOVE IT I LOVE IT I LOVE IT!!!!!!!! I know it might not be your most interesting or gratifying comment but it's the truth, I really can't wait to read more :)

This a pretty lovely story, and so far I'm really enjoying it. The premise is interesting: you've definitely set yourself up for a tough time! Some of the writing here is really quite lovely, as melancholy as it is. You have a nice knack for expressing emotion in a simplistic but very poetic way, which is really beautiful to read.

My only criticism is that you could do with a good proofreader: there were a few spelling errors and run on sentences, which could easily be fixed with some well-placed punctuation.

All in all, this is really enjoyable! Keep it up :)

@ lithe.
Cool, so that means he doesn't have that much age difference with the girl! (I kind of forgot her name 0.0 xP)

@ xXMissSerenaFreakXx thank you and he's twenty-two.

I love the story! How old is Ben exactly?

I love this. Please continue!

This is honestly wonderful.

And I love your layout :D

This is amazing!

This shocked me. This honestly just took my breath away, full out shocked me. I was expecting something insincere, like her parents got in a fight and she saw her mom leave or something. I never imagined you'd twist it like that, with something so outrageous. The element of surprise is extremely important in stories though, it keeps a reader hooked.

I can tell that you've put a considerable amount of work into the beginning of your story, seeing as it's incredibly long. If I wasn't so interested I probably would have skimmed it but lucky for you, I couldn't stop reading. I loved the beginning, the repeating of the date, October 6, 2000, what it meant to the girl, how she loves to count letters...that was really important and interesting. It added something special, it gave Tatum a trait.

I really liked this. I honestly have no words. You have good use of details and description but you didn't give away too much. That's great. Good job so far.

Love this story so far

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