If You Just Hold Your Breath - Comments

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I really like this. The description in it' s phenomenal. The spacing is perfect. And I love how your just getting to the point in the second chapter, yet the plot is still a mystery. It's great. Keep writing! (:

I love catching the Regina Spektor references. This is really well written and keeps me interested. Please continue.

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I LOVE how you started the first chapter. It makes you think what the story is really about. It's really descriptive! The chapters are short but so detailed that you get the point out. It flows so easily into each other. You're a really greater writer just from the 2 paragraph in the first chapter I could tell you are a really good writer. I'll recommend this too my friends on here. Keep up on the good work! ~Brittany