450 Species - Comments

First off, your title is great and automatically links with your picture. I really like it. However, and I know it's superficial, I think you should change the colours of the layout - reds and greens don't often go well together.

I'm normally not a fan of narrators directly speaking to their audiences but I quite liked the perspective in this case - especially seeing as I laughed out loud a few times at a few of the little remarks.

Your first paragraph is a bit muddled though. I'd take out the "Presentations continued on as each student stated their project" because it doesn't relate to the topic of the paragraph, and makes it clunky.

I loved the speech. I could just picture this really nervous guy just blurting it all out. Perfect.

I wish there had been more interaction between Alex and Chris at the end, but the ending is great regardless.

Overall, a very cute and amusing piece. Good luck in the contest!

@ DreamerHarlotSinner
That's so sweet! Thanks so much!

This is really good! And it actually helps me a lot for my entry, so I'm super glad I read this. It's very well written and the layout is wonderful!(I adore anything green) Good luck with the contest :)

@ tator
No problem, I love how you ended it with humor:):)

@ polka dot perfection
Thanks so much!

Loved it:)

OOO! i likies.... gonna be hard to beat this, just saying. I love the way you interpreted the picture. The layout is great. you made me laugh, quite a bit actually. And 'm sorry if my comment sucked, but I've never been good at doing good coments. -thumbs up. gives homemade cookies-