Scream - Comments

Ah this is great. It's not like typical "teen" stories here, which I really like. They get cliche after a while. The chapter was descriptive, had a lot of details. I love Addison and the character she is so far.

The story itself is interesting... Your boyfriend to be a serial killer... like COOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOL! I like the idea bu hopefully the true ending be not a mainstream one... I LIKE YOUR STORY... bow... very good idea though I am not a fan of romance... I like the twist of thriller to romance...

The first thing I noticed is that you changed tenses a few times. That's distracting. I like the voice though. The narration has a definite style and it makes the first person narration work. Your spelling and grammar is basically good, with the exception of the tense changes. I think your summary might be a little too busy, if that makes sense. When you're trying to hook people, sometimes less is more. I think your story's going to be really interesting and I like your narration. So keep it up.