The Charming Type - Comments

I love the Albert Camus quote. He's one of my favourite writers so that drew me in immediately and because when people have quotes for stories and story prompts, they're usually the same things. Seeing Camus's quote just made it stand out. And your summary was very captivating. It piqued my interest and I liked that you brought it back in with the end of the story as well. That was a nice tie in.

I really enjoyed the concept of Louis being able to charm and manipulate his way into getting whatever he wants. My favourite type of characters are typically the ones who know how to work over others like that and it was a change of pace from other One Direction stories I've read to see Louis portrayed this way.

I also like that you mentioned that Harry is usually seen as the charming one because of his looks, which I feel is reflected in stories. I think if most people were to write about one of the boys being a charmer in this sense, Harry would be the natural pick. So, again, it was nice to see that you made the most persuasive one the one you wouldn't most expect.

His teachers had called it cheek and his mother had agreed.

I wouldn't necessarily call any of what Louis did cheek, since none of it was really impertinent or sassy at all. Cheek is more back talk, sharp-tongued wit. Louis hadn't said or done anything like that, he was just successfully suggestive. Calling it cheek just felt like it really didn't describe what he did throughout the story at all.

This was a really great idea and I liked what you've written. It wasn't what I expected and I find that both wonderful and leaving me slightly wanting more. I liked that you gave an example of Louis talking each of the boys into something and doing it just because he wanted to see how far he could go. That was fabulous. The fact you made all the things with them things that have happened in real life was a really nice touch as well. Makes me think, well, why couldn't Louis have caused all that?

The only thing I'm not too keen on the brief overview feel of it. I would've loved to see one particular incident of him doing this, like with Harry and the tattoo. That itself would have been a great moment to flush out with dialogue and interaction to see just how Louis managed to do it. You mention so much how he talks all these people into what he wants, but you don't actually show us how he does it and that's the only thing I felt was missing from an otherwise good story. I would have just loved to see at least one entire situation play out to really see how Louis does it rather than just be told he's a master charmer.

Overall, it was well-written and I thoroughly enjoyed reading it. :)

Why can't there be more to this? You are so unbelievably talented and I would just love to have some story to follow where Louis unintentionally gets something and realizes he has to fix it and just read your writing. Ah. But really. This is excellent.

I love the rhetorical question at the end of the first paragraph. It's so funny that they try to keep him as a secret charmer. It's so cute. The subtle things about all the boys being charming but not as charming or secretive as Louis is so cute because I can totally see him being that way :)

The way that each boy is influenced by Louis is so funny. Niall's losing the bet, Liam breaking up with Danielle and changing his hair, Zayn's dyed hair, Harry's "hi" tattoo. I love it.

What I also love is that there is minimal dialogue. It really shows that you can write something really stunning and really well done with only narrative and little to no dialogue.

Well done, darling ;)

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...This one-shot. SO GOOD. I love all the examples of how Louis could charm the boys into doing whatever he wanted them to. It's incredibly perfect, and I found myself giggling throughout and nodding, totally picturing Louis doing this stuff. Almost as if Louis himself were charming me from inside the story... :o

I really do love this, and I'm so excited that it came out as well as it did. :D