*Comment swap There were just a few grammatical mistakes in this, but it got across what you were trying to convey. If you can fix that then this could be a better story. Overall though, it was to the point and detailed enough to imagine, so good job on that. It's an enjoyable read if your in the mood for it.
There were just a few grammatical mistakes in this, but it got across what you were trying to convey. If you can fix that then this could be a better story. Overall though, it was to the point and detailed enough to imagine, so good job on that. It's an enjoyable read if your in the mood for it.