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Of course I do! :tehe:

Well, I said I'd come and read this, and wow, was I not disappointed!

Really good writing from you, here.

The first few paragraphs are really great. I like how you describe Gerard as being hammered, whilst Bert is just tipsy. You've written the drunken-ness really well, too. :tehe:

And then we learn that he isn't really hammered, and it's like he was putting it on slightly, perhaps to gain attention from Bert?

It's also really interesting to note that Gerard's the drunk, out of control one whilst Bert's quite calm and sensible. Usually in Gerard/Bert stories its the other way around, so this is good.

And then when Mikey gets all protective over Gerard, its kinda sweet. Although I'm viewing the relationship as Bert going in a downward spiral because of Gerard. :think: I could be wrong though.

The last line was amazing. Really sums up the story well. :cute:

I really enjoyed reading this, it was pretty damn good if I'm being honest.

i loved it!
hehe whens the next one?
i feel like Bert too
im addicted to this story!
so update some time, eh?
did i say i loved it?
ehehe

You're such an amazing writer...so taleneted
I can see you being like Stephanie Meyer...people seriously obsessed with the books you may write :)

"We fucked right there on the floor of his hotel room. Every second was raw, dirty… beautiful."

I read dirty stories :P

xxx

That was good!

you made Bert the good guy for once.

good-ish...

Brilliant!
Awesome songfic. [:

Wonderful as always, I love everything you write.

:]

OOOH BABY!
damn this is the shizzzzz, and i loves it
twas BRILLIANT darling and so very emotional

"Love, lust, or whatever it was I was feeling was hitting me. He was wrong. I was wrong. We were so wrong, so bad, so dangerous."

i loved these lines ^^^ shows true boundaries in this relationship
i loved every little part of this story
much love to thou x x x x x x x x

I liked this because there isn't many Gerard and Bert stories on here. No way enough of them.

It's different to most stories with Gerard and Bert in them because usually Bert's the 'bad guy' but in this one Gerard kind of is because he's on at Bert to get him booze.

Awesome one-shot, shame it's only that

whoaaa!
That was friken' phenominal!
Bert and Gerard are described so amazingly together, both addicted to each other.
I love it!!

“Bert.” He spoke finally, making a whole sentence out of my name, using it to break the silence that had previously only been punctuated by my ragged gasps for air and the click of his cigarette lighter.

I loved that bit. It was written so well, proving how awesome you are!

xxxx

Oh my..

This is amazing!

Written really, really well. :)

Whoa.

This is....amazing.

I can't even begin to describe how much this blew me away.

Lovely.
I did a little 'yes!' sign when I read it.
Very, very good.
I was impressed.

I love the sparse, soiled, scrambled description of a relationship built on dirt and grime and poison. I love how Bert wants Gerard, but Gerard seems to almost put the alcohol before Bert... and I love how you pulled Mikey into it. I'm like the biggest fan of brotherly love, and everything here is so twisted and I love the line

“It’s easy to see you’re in a downward spiral. I am not going to let you drag Gerard down with you!”

I can almost imagine that as the line which contributed in the ruin of their friendship, even in real life. :XD That's how realistic and good it was. I was sinking my teeth in the controversy of this.

I also love how addicted Bert is... he knows it's wrong, but he just can't stop. Or he doesn't want to stop. I'm not sure, and I think that's how it's meant to be. We are left to wonder if it was their love that killed them at the end, or if the love was shattered but they were able to save themselves... or if they made it out together.

All in all, it was really, really, really VERY good.

I loved this, it was fantastic! The way you showed how helpless Bert was at the end there was amazing, and how you portrayed Gee's addiction to the alcohol, and their relationship, definitely one of the best Gerberts I think I;ve ever read, despite the fact that it is a short one. Bravo/brava!

xoxo

mrs i-dont-like-reading-sex :P

i thought it was very well written. well done ^_^

xxx

Is this the one-shot you were confessing about? :cheese:
I think it's amazing.
You depicted everything just perfectly, in my opinion. The way Gerard wanted it, and the way Bert was just a bit worried.
The way they were addicted - all of it.
it's truy amazing, and I'm sorry I can't give a better review...:shifty

bert 'n' gerard sex!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
so bittersweet ;)