Just thought i'd let you know... You've doubled your chapter :) Also, this is quite interesting! Though it isn't normally my style, I read through it and quite enjoyed it. The writing is completely different to my own but I am open to try all types and I really look forward to seeing what happens next!
Based on your writing, I'd love for you to check out my work. It probably won't be your style but that's who i'm looking for!