Screw the Wedding Bells - Comments

@ Elphie
Thanks for the comment! :D And I'm glad you liked it! (Your actually the first totally positive commenter XD I thought everyone hated it)

Haha, that was really fun to read.
I had no idea that it was from the point of view of a cat until I neared the end, and I have to say, I greatly enjoyed that little twist. It was also just very refreshing to read something humorous from an animal's point of view.
All in all, wonderful job! I loved it!

Thank you for the entry! I really like how you managed to incorporate humour into the story. I have never in my life been able to write a humorous story, since everything for me has to be angst and drama. I really respect anyone who can get a bit of comedy going with their characters.

3 improvements:
1. At first it feels a little bit like being thrown into the world you’re writing about, rather than slowly sinking in. I think I would’ve preferred a little more introduction to the story. Not a huge amount, but enough to find out how all the characters know each other and are related, since there was quite a bit left unanswered by the end.

2. Just a layout comment. I didn’t mind the whole thing, but after re reading quite a few times the font and colour are killing my eyes. A few words and punctuation get lost in the line above, so I think you just need to alter the font and line difference size.

3. You used all the given words well, but there were a few mistakes with other words. I wouldn’t be able to find them now to point out, but I’d say just give another careful look through to see if there are any obvious mistakes.

So on the whole, this was good! It’s been a long time since I read anything of this writing type or plot, so it was certainly interesting to read through. Good use of the words, too (actually the whole point of the contest). Well done!

ok... reread... and now it makes a whole lot more sence...

@ iBleedSarcasm
pretty sure i did... but was still confused.

@ I'mxJefferyxDahmer!
o.O Did you finish reading the story, because the identity of the narrator is stated.

@ iBleedSarcasm
well is the narrator a cat, or a human, or what?

@ I'mxJefferyxDahmer!
What's confusing you?

I'm so confused....