Guilty - Comments

Got here from comment swap.

First of I really like the title, it's simplistic, but meaningful. Your summary is superbly written, it hooks the reader before you even get onto the first chapter. I like your layout too, it's not to complicated :)

Your grammar is pretty good, and the idea is so original! You've laid out your chapters very well, the story flows well. I'm excited to read more of this, you've got a solid piece.

@ katiexlee
Thank you! I really appreciate that! I'll cross my fingers that it doesn't disappoint!

I really like this story so far. It's intriguing and different from anything else I've read. I'm really interested to see where this goes.

@ everybody dies;
Thank you so much for your comment--it's so in depth, and that's honestly such a wonderful, helpful thing! Haha, I'm sorry there are so many questions left! I know it can be frustrating, especially when a story isn't updated quickly :) Everything will be answered eventually, of course! Oh, thank you, thank you, thank you! This is the story I worry most about because it's an odd format--I'm so glad you think it works well!

@ Ashes to Graphite
Thank you so much! I'm so glad you like the story! I know the format is a little odd, so I worry about it being boring--it's definitely a relief to have people say they like it!
Thank you again!!

Oh my, I really love this! As someone said below, I've read stories being told through diary format, but never taping. It's such a unique idea and that's what drew me to this story in the first place. I love the air of mystery about this as well. I'm six chapters in and I still don't know everything, which leaves me clamouring for more. Silias is really intriguing, as much as I hate him. His character just seems to be so otherworldly, especially with what he made Dylan's dad do. I think he's the one thing about this story that has me completely and utterly hooked, because he's just so strange. Combining that with the fact that you haven't let away a lot of the plot yet and I'm left with almost a zillion questions in my head. Usually I'd complain about that (I hate being left with questions to answer) but I have a feeling that all will be revealed in the coming chapters, so I'm really excited to see if what I've thought up in my head matches the actual events.

The fact that you have everything completely narrated as well makes it really interesting. We don't get to see the body language of Ash and Dylan, but there is still an awful lot of emotion and character portrayed through the words and sounds that you've added in. I'm not the biggest fan of reading through masses of dialogue, but it works ridiculously well here. I honestly adore the fact that we only hear their voices and other sounds they make instead of being allowed into their innermost thoughts through actions. It's a truly unique idea and I think you've written it fantastically well here.

I don't know if it was just because I was so engrossed in the story, but I didn't notice as many grammar errors as the other comments seemed to suggest were present. Sure, I noticed one or two instances where you'd made minor errors but that's to be expected.

All in all, I think this is excellent. I'll definitely be subscribing to see what happens next!

This story is super cool, I must say! :) I love the whole plot and everything, and the format is really creative. There are so many nuances in the narration; you know what's going on, but the author doesn't have to say it blatantly which I like! Keep up the good work, definitely subscribing. :)

@ XXXataktoulaXXX
Thank you so much! I'm glad that you enjoy my story so much! Usually I'm pretty good with grammar so I'll have to make sure I'm not making idiotic mistakes--thank you for the heads up. Again, I appreciate the feedback, it means a lot!

Dear author, I already subscribed on this. I liked the title a bit too much. "Guilty" simple but deep. The summary was superb and well-written. The format for the titles of your chapters amazed me. I wasn't expecting that but I liked the idea. Nice work on the layout and the kick-ass storyline. Mega Brownie points for the whole thing. As for grammar/spelling mistakes get a beta, editor and you'll be fine. I really loved this, so keep it up. ~Marian.

Dear author, I already subscribed on this. I liked the title a bit too much. "Guilty" simple but deep. The summary was superb and well-written. The format for the titles of your chapters amazed me. I wasn't expecting that but I liked the idea. Nice work on the layout and the kick-ass storyline. Mega Brownie points for the whole thing. As for grammar/spelling mistakes get a beta, editor and you'll be fine. I really loved this, so keep it up. ~Marian.

You Are KIDDING ME!
This Idea Is SOOOOO Original. I've read stories told through Diary Entry or Video Entry but I've never read anything told through taping. I love how you name the chapters and your layout is PERFECT for this story.
I've only read the first chapter but that was so intriguing I HAD to subscribe! The first entry was so captivating and I just KNOW something CREEPY is going on!
I'm Going To Stay Tuned!

BTW, LOVE THE NAME DYLAN!
Superb Job! Superb!

Comment Swap: I really like how you've arranged this piece; the layout is simple though not boring and your chapters names are a great idea in reference to the tape being played. The plot line is great too, but I have to say the story itself suffers. The writing needs grammatical work done and i think you need to shuffle your narrative around. In my opinion, writing narrative like this where it isnt first person but someone actually speaking the entire time is extremely difficult. There are few authors that can really do this and make it sound good, so don't be discouraged. I think took some time to rewrite you could make it a fantastic piece.

Comment Swap. I love this! First off the layout was fabulous, secondly, the summary was grand! And the plot line! Oh, the plot line! It's unique and humorous, but easy to follow and entertaining. Keeps you interested. Keep up the good work!