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  • IloveDavidTennant

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    UPDATE
    UPDATE NOW
    July 8th, 2014 at 03:25am
  • Sparklingbows

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    Wow you should update I really like this!
    August 19th, 2013 at 08:51pm
  • GiraffeGiraffes

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    Please update:)
    July 24th, 2013 at 07:13am
  • Saul Hudson

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    Please update this
    June 19th, 2013 at 09:38pm
  • Fadingdreams

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    update sooon!
    February 7th, 2013 at 12:07pm
  • QuietSports

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    I am in love with this story! Please update it! And soon~!
    December 29th, 2012 at 01:55am
  • Morgieee0

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    I Like It ! I Think Yu Should Keep Writing It . Cant Wait For The Next Update !
    December 24th, 2012 at 04:09am
  • fairyfeller

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    Like Smilie said, I think it's a little odd how Liza goes from rebellious to giving in so quickly - I think having her continue to fight him off would be more realistic. I also think that a bit more description would be good. But I like how you managed to give a clear insight into what her life was like beforehand.
    December 3rd, 2012 at 06:26pm
  • Loudness War

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    I first off liked how simplistic the layout was, and the story itself was different than what I would usually read. I also liked the way the characters spoke as it fits the setting and time of the story. Overall this was a very interesting read, so good job!
    December 3rd, 2012 at 05:48pm
  • Smilie

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    It's a really good start. There could be a lot more too it, though. She was very rebellious at first, then toned down a lot rather quickly. For someone she seemed to hate so much, she warmed up fast. I think she should be more apprehensive.
    December 3rd, 2012 at 02:28pm
  • Smilie

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    It's a really good start. There could be a lot more too it, though. She was very rebellious at first, then toned down a lot rather quickly. For someone she seemed to hate so much, she warmed up fast. I think she should be more apprehensive.
    December 3rd, 2012 at 02:28pm
  • Smilie

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    Good so far :)
    December 3rd, 2012 at 02:26pm
  • Smilie

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    You should keep going
    December 3rd, 2012 at 02:21pm