Woah, what a powerful story. I love the way this is written. It's oddly vague and straightforward at the same time, like the way it's written is so matter-of-fact, but the activities going on in this lack details so it's kind of vague. I like that it's got a bit of a choppy feel, but at the same time it flows very well. It's a contradiction, I know, but it's just quite different and unique to read. I like the thoughts of the narrator a lot. It's so raw and emotional, but in contrast to the narrator, the "You" in the story is just cold and selfish.
I think this is just beautiful overall. It's wonderfully written, it's intense, and it's kind of heartbreaking. The narrator is quite pitiful. It's just a flawless story.
This was gorgeous. I'm not normally overly-fond of first-person writing, but this was absolutely something else. Beautiful and simple and perfect. Well done.
I think this is just beautiful overall. It's wonderfully written, it's intense, and it's kind of heartbreaking. The narrator is quite pitiful. It's just a flawless story.