Queen of the Living Dead - Comments

Darkness-rises (100)

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love it! keep writing

December 16th, 2012 at 07:07am

KallieCadaver (100)

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Love this story, keep those chapter coming! :D

December 14th, 2012 at 06:32am

Kimmy_bubble.gum (100)

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love,Love,LOve,LOVe,LOVE!!!

December 11th, 2012 at 12:17am

kmgator (100)

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I enjoy the story line so far along with the theme and such. One note of constructive criticism isn't so much on your writing or grammar but moreso how the story looks in the chapter format; I don't know if you intend for it to appear as one big long drawn out paragraph but when it's like that it is difficult to read and follow. An extra press or two of the enter bar makes a difference.

Just a small bit of advice. Everything else is pretty right on, then again, comma use and run on sentences aren't my fortè.

December 10th, 2012 at 09:29pm