The Exam - Comments

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Literally from mutant birds exacting revenge for hundreds of years of Thanksgivings past onwards... I was reading this with the biggest. Goofiest. Dorkiest grin on my face. Ever. Ah! This was so cool, the idea! The characters, the action, all of it. Your descriptions too, absolutely superb. Whether or not you continue this master piece, it certainly stands out as beautifully unique. And wonderful. Thank you. For totally and completely making my night. :)

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I love the way you opened with action straight away, and then slowing it right down with your character waking up. I also like the way the character talks to the reader, comparing their situation to our own, it makes the character seem friendlier to me.

The description was really nice, and the concept overall I think is really cool, even if I found it hard to wrap my head around the first time I read it (I'm sleepy right now, bear in mind) until it got to the part explaining what Ideas were.

Hello, here from the comment swap!
I love the way you opened with action straight away, and then slowing it right down with your character waking up. I also like the way the character talks to the reader, comparing their situation to our own, it makes the character seem friendlier to me.

The description was really nice, and the concept overall I think is really cool, even if I found it hard to wrap my head around the first time I read it (I'm sleepy right now, bear in mind) until it got to the part explaining what Ideas were.

@ Jason Storm @ AutumnSky
Thanks so much for the comments, I really do appreciate it. This is definitely one of my older pieces, but getting back to it and seeing the good comments is really great. I've been considering ways in which I could take and continue this story, so I will definitely start working on that soon, especially with the good feedback I'm getting. Character description is something I've been working on as a writer as well as plot development, so hopefully if I ever get back around to actually writing more on this, I will be able to flush this out a bit more. Thanks again!

Pretty good. I really liked the idea of it, or at least what i gathered from it. the words weren't repetitive and kept me interested. Character description was a little on the skimpy side but other than that a pretty good story. creative idea. Good job

This was actually quite well written. It's an idea that I've certainly never read - having to take back a character from your inner ideas to pass an exam...I have to say I was surprised. At the beginning, when you just started talking about the under developed character and main it threw me for a second but then that's when I began to understand. Since it's a short story and the way it left off, it has me wondering about what happens after. I think you should continue this when you get time to because it's a unique idea and it's not something that's been recycled over and over again. I think this story has a real shot. Character wise and the way it was written was great. I can honestly see nothing negative to report. The spelling and grammar were excellent and it flowed well.

@ Dinosuarslippers

Ah thanks! I haven't been active on Mibba at all lately because of my crazy schedule, which makes me very sad, but your comments do mean a lot to me :D I will certainly try to be more active, especially with this story, time and sanity permitting

Wow! I did the comment swap thingy and got this story and I'm more than glad I did! Please tell me that you're going to try and continue this story! It was so fresh and original I really like the premise of the fictional characters, the half ideas, it had an almost Alice in Wonderland like quality to it! I am curious to know who the Three are as well, oh and of coure the idea-villain!

Very good short, and I'd read more of you wrote it! <3

@ jacasaurusrex and @ dream'n.reality.

Thanks so much for the wonderful comments! It's always good to hear :) all suggestions are appreciated, so I will definitely keep them in mind! :D

Such a cool little one-shot! I will admit my idiocy and say I didn't quite understand every little bit of it but the premise was so original and imaginative that I have nothing but good things to say about it. This is the second of your works I have read and I am really digging your style! I look forward to more from you either with this or with other pieces.

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This is really good and just written amazingly. The descriptions you used in your writing just add the perfect amount to the story. You don't have too much or not enough: it's just perfect. The imagery and detail that is in this is stunning. The only suggestion is just to revise and edit, and maybe a banner? good job!

Well, isn't this peculiar...

I was looking for an interesting read on today, and so I happened to find this intelligent work of art. However, I think it's beautiful as is, and you should never push yourself too much to live up to the standards of a preface in a book.

Wonderful, btw :)

@ dexter - Wow, thank you so much! I have actually been working on my longer version, so I will continue especially thanks to awesome feedback like yours. It's so nice to hear such great things like that, it really pushes me as a writer! Love the pun, by the way :D

Thanks again :)

This story is just too awesome for words, but I will try my best to provide a helpul comment, instead of praising profoundly like I want to do. I spotted a few mistakes, though they don't distract much from the main plot of the story, so I suppose those don't matter. The story is extremely original and just too awesome for words. Seriously, continue with the story, I'm certain it will grow to be rather popular. You have a sub from my part.

Well, apart from the minimal amount of mistakes, the characters were depicted perfectly, as was the setting. The introduction of your idea (pun!) was elaborated smoothly and clear. So, nice job on that! Do continue with this plot, because I certainly will be following it!

I congratulate you on the awesome story. Keep up the good work! <3

This is really good and extremely original! c: Awesome job!

Do tell me if you will be continuing this story!

Poor kid, at least he's only two dimensional and might not have a well developed story and thus, probably no reason to kill him off with a poisoned little animal...

@ discoveringclouds - Haha, yeah maybe, but at that point the kid was sort of desperate for food. :P I'm glad you liked it!

If you shoot something with poison darts that kill, and then you eat it, won't you die?

This is an awesome idea... I really want to know what happens next. Lol turnitin...