Let me just start off with.... the layout of this story is fucking amazing. Now, it's not important to the quality of a story, but I always find good layouts to be some kind of cherry on top, and I'm actually not surprised I love this one so much. Great work, hun, especially the banner! I love it.
My first reaction to this, I need to write down, is really just wow. This one shot is GREAT. I'm picky about shit, so I do mean that. It takes a lot to really make me enjoy a short story so much. The only little negative thing I can mentioned, and pet peeve, I kind of have to, there's some tense skips in the story and it sometimes gets a bit irritating, so I'd suggested to go over that. Other than that, flawless.
I was pulled into this really quickly. I loved how you gave a very short start into the story and then immediately describe a flashback. I have to point out that it's especially the flashbacks I enjoyed in this. I think it helped create a great atmosphere for the story, especially how they kept coming up, how you skipped between what was happening and his memories. AT FIRST I THOUGHT HIS FUCKING WIFE DIED OR SOMETHING AND NOW HE HAD TO PRETEND SO SMILE AT WEDDING SO I WAS NOT REALLY PREPARED? I like an element of surprise. xD But seriously, you couldn't really guess, until reading a bit further, what was actually up. It very all in all very intense and emotional and I felt his pain, I swear. The flashbacks were so cute...the way he interacted with Ruby...... the flashback of him cheating was especially fucked up. I was a bit shocked to find that's why their relationship ended. BUT HIS BEST FRIEND MARRYING THE LOVE OF HIS LIFE? And he has to just SMILE AND WATCH AND BE A GOOD GUY? That's so cruel. It's a great story! ....... Left me wanting more. It just screams drama and emotional traumas. Either way, also works very well as a one shot, even if it's teasing. Short, but intense and detailed and all around great work!
Let me just start off with.... the layout of this story is fucking amazing. Now, it's not important to the quality of a story, but I always find good layouts to be some kind of cherry on top, and I'm actually not surprised I love this one so much. Great work, hun, especially the banner! I love it.
My first reaction to this, I need to write down, is really just wow. This one shot is GREAT. I'm picky about shit, so I do mean that. It takes a lot to really make me enjoy a short story so much.
The only little negative thing I can mentioned, and pet peeve, I kind of have to, there's some tense skips in the story and it sometimes gets a bit irritating, so I'd suggested to go over that. Other than that, flawless.
I was pulled into this really quickly. I loved how you gave a very short start into the story and then immediately describe a flashback. I have to point out that it's especially the flashbacks I enjoyed in this. I think it helped create a great atmosphere for the story, especially how they kept coming up, how you skipped between what was happening and his memories.
AT FIRST I THOUGHT HIS FUCKING WIFE DIED OR SOMETHING AND NOW HE HAD TO PRETEND SO SMILE AT WEDDING SO I WAS NOT REALLY PREPARED? I like an element of surprise. xD
But seriously, you couldn't really guess, until reading a bit further, what was actually up. It very all in all very intense and emotional and I felt his pain, I swear. The flashbacks were so cute...the way he interacted with Ruby...... the flashback of him cheating was especially fucked up. I was a bit shocked to find that's why their relationship ended. BUT HIS BEST FRIEND MARRYING THE LOVE OF HIS LIFE? And he has to just SMILE AND WATCH AND BE A GOOD GUY? That's so cruel.
It's a great story! ....... Left me wanting more. It just screams drama and emotional traumas. Either way, also works very well as a one shot, even if it's teasing. Short, but intense and detailed and all around great work!