*Judge for December contest: Pick a Present* I don't read a lot of fan fics that much and to be honest, I didn't know who Gerard Way is but I was glad to read a story like this. It was hard to describe this story but what I loved the most about this was the words that you used to describe the situation they were in and I immediately felt entranced. However, when it came to grammar, I was a little upset. It wasn't because I was a grammar nazi; it was because I thought that the story was really good that it deserved to be written properly (with the correct punctuations and the correct spacing). e.g. She was sat across from that very person, the one who once held her heart. -in my opinion, it should have been: "She was sitting across from that very person..." Anyhow, if I were not to judge the grammar but the story and the plot itself, it was great! Keep up writing and focus more on the grammar. :bd
I don't read a lot of fan fics that much and to be honest, I didn't know who Gerard Way is but I was glad to read a story like this. It was hard to describe this story but what I loved the most about this was the words that you used to describe the situation they were in and I immediately felt entranced.
However, when it came to grammar, I was a little upset. It wasn't because I was a grammar nazi; it was because I thought that the story was really good that it deserved to be written properly (with the correct punctuations and the correct spacing).
e.g. She was sat across from that very person, the one who once held her heart. -in my opinion, it should have been: "She was sitting across from that very person..."
Anyhow, if I were not to judge the grammar but the story and the plot itself, it was great! Keep up writing and focus more on the grammar. :bd