Polaroid - Comments

Yay update on my birthday! :) this is truly amazing the way it's so detailed makes me want more and more :)

The summery was amazing, i loved the detail in it. It was my favorite part of the story so far. I can't wait to find out what all those little secrets are. Your writing style is very original, and has a pleasant feel to it. It's a really page turner (chapter)

First of all, I love the description! I think it gives the story a little "flare" along with the picture in the layout. The story I found amazing! I absolutely love your writing style and you kept the story interesting and made me keep wanting more. While I found a few grammar or spelling mistakes, there were not many, and didn't distract me too badly. All in all, great story! I loved it! :)

I simply adore this story! It's so well written and yet so unexpected I'm dying for more :)

I also found this over the comment swap and glad they gave me this book. It is really interesting with that good touch of mystery and suspense to it.

i found this through the comment swap! i like your writing style, it's interesting and you definitely have a handle on your characters. the ending of the first chapter was intriguing, you know how to make a reader interested. the main pointer i would give is to reread and revise. i found several spelling and grammar mistakes. for example saying your instead of you're or forgetting commas when needs. it made it hard for me to focus sometimes. other than that, good luck with your story!

That was honestly really interesting and I will be reading more once you update it. Love the suspense and vocabulary and it was very intense. Keep updating please! I wasn't expecting most of the events in the story which made it even more surprising, which is good. The theme is really cool too and I can't wait to read more. Great plot and the ending is gonna be really interesting, I can tell. Again, loved it :)

I think it's great! I love your vocab and i'm excited to read more. Keep it up!

Firstly I have to say I LOVE the picture of the peoples with the animal heads, dunno why, i find it querky and interesting to see a picture like that. Anywho, I love your writing, flows nicely, easy to read noticed few mistakes but for the life of me I can't remember where or which line. Nothing to worry about I don't think- otherwise I would have remembered. Glad I found this too. I shall be reading more, update soon! =)

I realllylllllly like your writing! It's beautiful, like almost every bit of writing on mibba. Though the first chapter confused me a bit when I read it the first time :P over all, I think the whole thing is freaking awesome!!!!!! There are a few spelling mistakes that you have to fix, but all in all, fabulous! I'll be sure to keep reading it :)

I also noticed how the status says keep it or kill it. For sure, you need to keep it. Don't even think about killing such and amazing thing :))

I Love It ! C: Uncle Todd Seems Creepy Thou .. & I Cant Wait To Hear More About Him & Why He's A Monster . Tht Part Made Me Want To Just Keep Reading , But There's No More Chapters . Lol , Pleaseeee Update Soon ! Also , Does Her Dad Abuse All Of Them Or Just Her Mom ?

Your writing is beautiful and very captivating. I love the way you use descriptive language and foreshadowing, definitely makes me intrigued of what's to come. As the story is still in its beginning stages it's hard to come up with negatives, but if I have to pinpoint one it would be the small spelling mistakes, which many people have already mentioned. All in all you've done a great job, and I will for sure keep on reading this!

Oh wow...I was not expecting that turn in the story. It definitely angered me, but don't get offended, I'm just saying your writing has definitely made me feel some type of emotion.

I saw a few spelling mistakes, but I'm sure you were tired, or your finger's decided to have tourettes in that moment, regardless it's not big deal at all. I loved this, you definitely need to update soon! I'm also recommending this.

Great job, darling. Hope you update soon :]

Oh wow...I was not expecting that turn in the story. It definitely angered me, but don't get offended, I'm just saying your writing has definitely made me feel some type of emotion.

I saw a few spelling mistakes, but I'm sure you were tired, or your finger's decided to have tourettes in that moment, regardless it's not big deal at all. I loved this, you definitely need to update soon! I'm also recommending this.

Great job, darling. Hope you update soon :]

I was brought here via comment swap. Okay, wow! The first chapter...man, all the detail, and the way the narrator sounds so real. I love it so far, and this is just the first chapter. The end though, that definitely got my attention.

But like I said, this is just the comment from the first chapter, i will post another as well, haha! I love the writing so far :]

Comment Swap brought me here. This story immediately drew me in and made me curious to learn more about the narrator. I love the mystery of the prologue and the descriptions you used. I especially love the way you described her Papa mowing the lawn. It was extremely vivid. I'm definitely subscribing and recommending! Great job and update soon, please!

This was very beautiful, mainly because I thought it would be somewhat relatable to some readers. I enjoy your descriptions, the simple individual words composed into a very appealing sentence. It was an honest-to-God wonderful couple of chapters, and I loved it!

The complication of the story seems very well thought out, and I love the tone of the narrator's words: melancholic and somewhat detailed when describing the scenery. Did I mention how much I loved this story?

Love it!

Very good story, I don't really like to read but I enjoy writing and this is one of the few stories that I actually wanted to keep reading. There was a couple of grammar errors here and there so if you are on word, my suggestion to you would be to use spell check, if not, you can try going over your story before you post them, other than that, very good story I hope you add more to it. It's like a real life situation I can see some people in, and your 14 year old brother sounds pretty realistic, I'm 14 and me and all of my friends cuss alot and my cousin sometimes gets mad when I do it too much. My favorite part that I kinda laughed at is when you said " Way to let the robbers knew we're up her you idiot!" that sounds like something a paranoid person would say. Good story, hope you keep updating it. :)

This is a very interesting set up for your story, the last line is extremely powerful and makes me want to keep reading to find out what happens :). There are a lot of grammatical errors I noticed. Most were comma placement, some sentence structure errors.
Main one I noticed:

"While mother lay asleep in their room." (it's not a complete thought, so it can either be added to the preceding sentence or you can add to the sentence to finish the thought.)
ex: I could see him in the ungodly hours of the night sneaking our neighbor, Mrs. Perkins, into his room in the attic, while mother lay asleep in their room.

Sometimes re-reading aloud will help you notice more things or having someone read and correct for you. Overall it is a good start and I hope you will continue :)