You Had My Heart at Least for the Most Part - Comments

Zacky's with an apostrophe, dear. Lullabies, with an ie. And "Pleasure's". Also Capitalize every word in the title of a chapter.
Okay noooow Annoying Critical Raroman is Out.

Dudelo put some spaces in your writing. And you start a new paragraph for dialogue.
Annoying Critical Raroman Out!

Oh shit, Zacky is fighting back oh shit kill tht motherfucker Zacky or just injure him really bad, but either way fight for ur man Zacky....tht bastard took u away from ur man, raped u, tried to kill u and he hurt Brian, Zacky whoop tht bastard's ass, can't wait to read more update as soon as u can :)

Oh fuck. I really hope that Zee kills that mothercunt. I hate him stupid dick face wanker. You have done an excellent job of creating a character that can be very easily hated, like super easily. God I really hope someone comes to help Zee especially with all his battle wounds.
Part of me kinda want him to get out of this himself then save himself just to prove what a badass he really is.

You go Zack! Kill that horrible Sam!!! Kill him!!
Ok now I'm done with my little rant.

@ SevenfoldfoREVer1666
Thank u and yes Zacky fighting back! I just had to!

That bitch...
Hurting my Zacky...
Well imma Kill him....
but it was SOOOOOOOOOOOOOO cute Zee fighting back!!! (:
I LOVE YOU!!! and your story!

I want to kill sam right now like legit...and like sparklesaresome i wanna stab sam fifty fucking times

@ NaturalBornKiller.
Haha I'm glad. I was hoping someone would find that song lyric quote funny.

@ Sparklesaresome
Dude you made me laugh!

Anyone else feeling the urge to stab Sam fifty fucking times?

@ SevenfoldfoREVer1666
I love u to!!

Oh holy shit!!!
Wow!!
made me laugh and then get sad alittle...
its so cute when Bri was protecting Zach!!
I cant wait to read more!
I fuckin love it and you!

Noo Brian, Zacky kick tht bastard in his balls and thn kick him in his nose, come on Zacky don't give up can't wait to read more update as soon as u can :)

Hit him Brian hit him kick his ass! I really can't wait for the next chapter

I hope Sam gets what he deserves! And Zack needs to tell Brian the truth so he can beat the shit out of Sam.

Zacky tell Brian the truth tell him tht Sam threaten to kill him if u didnt cooperate and thn Brian punch the hell out of tht son of bitch, can't wait to read more update as soon as u can :)

Ps. READERS, start commenting like now equals more updates

@ MoMo_92
Updated :)

Oh snap shit just got real and Brian is pissed and Zacky u r surely fucked and Sam u r twice as fucked, it's about to get good and I'm excited, can't wait to read more update as soon as u can :)

@ MoMo_92
U better hope XD