April 30th, 2014 at 10:32am
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I wasn’t sure what to expect from the description but this truly is an amazing piece of writing, the whole thing just flows beautifully. You have a way with words and your descriptions are so detailed and vivid.
I noticed one little error though. Dialouge should finish with a coma if its followed by a dialouge tag. For example “I want to fly.” Rose said, should have a coma. Other than that this story is perfect c:
So wow. Can I just leave that? ha You have a truly incredible gift. There is so much raw talent and emotion within your words. The descriptions felt so intensely real. And the end when she jumped, I swear I could feel his anger. It was quite a strong feeling. All in all this is an incredible piece and I will continue to read as I go along! Thank you so much for this. Truly phenomenal.