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OHMYGOODNESS I LOVE IT your writing is gorgeous and full of images

I just have to say that this was super adorable. I just love the explanation that he has about falling in love. And the ending, oh my goodness. It was so cute! I just couldn't help but smile when reading it. I guess I could say that I was as surprised as she was, especially when he was explaining the last ten seconds. But, I mean, I wasn't expecting him to not fall in love with her after the cute explanation, but I was still surprised.

Anyway, like I said before, was fantastic and cute. You did an amazing job this piece!

This story is really cute and well written. I loved your descriptions. Your imagery is just lovely. It's so vivid without being excessive or flowery and the way in which you wrote the narration was gorgeous. It flowed wonderfully and I loved the small little bits that make it feel like the narrator is casually talking instead of formally writing/telling a story.

I feel like it's a bit of a jump to go from talking about the rain to talking about love in sixty seconds. I see where the connection lies during his explanation, but it still feels like it's missing an initial transition between the topics.

The explanation of each ten seconds of the minute it takes to fall in love were really sweet and heartwarming though. I liked the tiny gestures he makes while talking that hint to the narrator he's confessing his feelings for them. It was cute that you tied everything together with that part. I especially liked how they snapped at each other for not bringing an umbrella at the beginning and you listed that sort of bickering as one of the parts to falling in love.

Overall, this was wonderful to read.

That was really well written! I really enjoyed this.