Great job.. They definitely moving at the right speed.. cant wait for more!
December 20th, 2012 at 02:06pm
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I really like this...hope you update soon.December 20th, 2012 at 12:27pm
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This is cute and fun to read. You're doing a good job but I have a couple suggestions.
No links for outfits would be much better. As a writer you should be able to describe that and if not, leave it out. Readers tend not to care that much about outfits.
Some of the grammar is off. Puncuation mostly. If you have questions about grammar I would be more than happy to help!
Last thing. Put spaces between paragraphs. It makes it worlds easier to read! And don't forget that every time someone speaks, it is a new paragraph.
Keep up the good work!December 20th, 2012 at 08:10am -
Love the new chapters! Looking forward to more!December 19th, 2012 at 03:46pm
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Awe thanks guys! New chapters coming your way!! :DDecember 19th, 2012 at 03:49am
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UPDATE SOON IT'S REALLY GOODDecember 18th, 2012 at 10:09pm
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this is really good!!!!!!! i love ava and I can't wait for an update!December 18th, 2012 at 07:15pm
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I really like it! Hope you update soon!December 18th, 2012 at 01:35pm
