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  • paracosm.

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    I'm not really a fan of Matt Sanders stories, but this was fun to read. :) You have a lot of dialouge, which makes the whole thing very fast paced and exciting, and you're able to progress through the plot fairly quickly.

    “Well he isn’t now is he? He left you for some slut and now you’re alone and depressed.”

    I feel like such a horrible person but I laughed at this. Facepalm I seem to be drawn to bitchy/sarcastic characters, male or female.

    I sigh and flip my hair and then I start to speak.

    “My name is Mariah Williams. I’m 17. My best feature is my tits because they are fucking huge, I like to watch student-teacher porn and masturbate every night.”

    You see? She's a total bitch but I like her a lot. xD Sigh. And she has a pretty good sense of humour, haha.

    She had long, straight black hair, blue eyes, extremely thin body, she was on the cheerleading team, she is really ugly, and he voice made you want to bang your head against a brick wall. I on the other hand have long, brown, wavy hair, brown eyes, I am super curvy, I’m a dancer, and I’m gorgeous.

    The impression I got off of Mariah in this part was that she was pretty conceited, but I suppose that fits in with her personality. Also Vanessa is like the epitome of prep oh my god I hate her.
    February 23rd, 2013 at 05:25pm
  • synful_desires

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    This chapter may be shorter than the other ones, but girl, it was fucking good! Haha I fucking loved that Vanessa had her bitch face beat up by Mariah and the fact to know that my BriBri is teaching in the same school as Matt was the highlight of my entire reading. xD I really can't wait for the next update!!!! xoxo
    February 22nd, 2013 at 06:24pm
  • CountSynula

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    Great update love! Vanessa got what she deserved! She's obviously a skank ass hoe and needed to be taught a lesson. I love your writing! Keep up the good work.
    February 22nd, 2013 at 02:34am
  • shortygirl

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    loved the update
    February 22nd, 2013 at 12:00am
  • Quoth Raven

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    I'm glad she beat the crap out of Vanessa, but that's sad about her best friend issues. Great update!
    February 21st, 2013 at 10:58pm
  • SaraHorlyk

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    You go girl! I loved this updated!
    February 21st, 2013 at 09:21pm
  • Synyster Gates;

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    I love this
    January 29th, 2013 at 03:50am
  • synful_desires

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    OMG I just can't imagine Matt dancing salsa in real life. LOL That was very funny. I felt sorry for Mariah now, behind a tough person there is a fragile one who just want to be hold and loved; I hope she lets Matt's in and save her from her tragic end if she keep with this beahviour. A great update as always! <3
    January 28th, 2013 at 09:45pm
  • silent hearts.

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    I loved that dancing chapter! It was great :) I just hope she finds her way to him.
    January 28th, 2013 at 04:55pm
  • DaniGates

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    I love this story. It's fantastic! And I used to go to school with a girl named Vanessa Mareno. I swear! She had dark hair and brown eyes though. Haha! I hope there's an update soon. I love the awkwardness between them sometimes. Matt and Mariah will have tons of intense fights. I know that for sure. :D
    January 28th, 2013 at 09:20am
  • BeenDownThatRoad

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    Omg, just picturing Matt do the salsa sent my pulse racing! How friggin hot would that be! Imposture him As more of an mma fighter or something along those lines. Great update. I feel really bad for her. She feels like she's all alone when she's really not. Loved Brian this time too, he was just trying to help her. Update soon!
    January 28th, 2013 at 05:05am
  • shortygirl

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    Does her mother know that her grandma is dead? I feel bad for her..she needs to vent to someone
    January 28th, 2013 at 05:02am
  • synful_desires

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    Loved the update!!! I hope one day Mariah slap Vanessa's bitch face, seriously, she reminds me of some bitches and I just... ugh! I was so happy when BriBri made an appearance on the story! *-* Hope you can update asap! xoxo
    January 27th, 2013 at 07:39pm
  • xShadows

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    Pretty please update again soon! I love this!
    January 27th, 2013 at 06:07am
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    Lmao of course you do.
    January 27th, 2013 at 02:15am
  • CountSynula

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    That was a great chapter but you know me, I want Matt sex! lol!!!!!
    January 27th, 2013 at 01:19am
  • BeenDownThatRoad

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    Loved this:) I like how u switched pov's and I also really liked Brian and Zacky's cameo:) update soon please! I want more Matt and Mariah content:D
    January 26th, 2013 at 05:55am
  • shortygirl

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    Your writing really has improved. I remember when you had just started "I give you my soul". I think you will reach your goal of 100 subscribers
    January 26th, 2013 at 04:42am
  • Synyster Gates;

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    I really like this hun.
    January 26th, 2013 at 04:36am
  • Quoth Raven

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    Awkward...so I'm loving this and I can't wait to see what happens next. I can't believe all she got was a lecture and three weeks, my mom would have cut my head off and kept it in a glass case! lol
    January 26th, 2013 at 04:32am
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