March 15th, 2013 at 02:15pm
@ NoSecretsExcept
I really liked that point, and honestly it was very flowly. But the fact that she just let him be with her in that way, and she didn't care, is just so disturbing to me. It would be cute if they were a new couple that got married and were getting to know each other properly for the first time. There's so much more hope in that set up. I'm glad you liked my point, a lot of the times authors defend the weird/illogical things their characters do...for no apparent reason. haha you seem nice :)
I don't really read these type of stories and I couldn't really get into it however I did notice a few grammar, spelling and word choice errors. I think it could be really good with a proof reader. Really good start though. Carry on the good work