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That was very well written; I usually don't read stuff like this but I guess I do need variety haha (I've been reading fanfictions for over 2 weeks lol) This story reminds me a lot of Sid Vicious and Nancy Spungen... especially when I came across this while reading "...You know I saw right through you the moment I met you and your rubbish about how you don’t believe in love..." Sid told Nancy when she tried snuggling him, that sex was boring and that it was hippie shit. Ha it just reminded me of that. Anyway good story, it was very interesting and fun for me to read:)

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Oh, it took me a little while to realize it was in Harry Styles' point of view. But that's a good thing, I guess. I like when people write stories in a man's point of view. It's different.

I spotted a few grammatical errors here and there, but the story was nice, simple, easy to read and it fit what you were trying to do.

Good luck in the contest!

awh that was super cute. The only constructive criticism I would give would be that you may have overused the "Half of my heart" part in the story. It became slightly over-repetitive. But other than that, I thought it was great, good job!