Surrendering - Comments

omg. Why. The. Hell. Have. I. Just. Read. This. Now?!! Wallahi! (and im not even arab lol). Im so behind! I saw this link in your signature thing and i was so mesmerised by the end of just the first chapter! Can i just say, you are one of the most talented writers ive ever come across and thats saying something. Because ive read a LOT of books. You encapture my attention and thoughts so quickly that i didnt even realise. Honestly. Mashallah so talented.

@ ToastedMuffins15
The chapters are up now, So thanks for being the reason. ;)

It's okay I understand, I was just making checking if you actually read my story or not, because I was sure I had taken it down!

I've been stuck on a story for comment sway as well, no matter how many comments I leave, it won't let me pass! :(

@ discoveringclouds
Yes, I'm trying to get past the comment swap, but I really did think that was actually all there was. I promise, when the chapters are up I will actually READ it. Hold me to my word and even message me. And sorry, if that sounded bad (my comment), but honestly, I thought that was it and I really wanted to get the ball rolling with the whole comment swap thing.

@ ToastedMuffins15
You know that the chapters are missing right? Lol... When I put them up again feel free to read them.

Lol... You're just trying to get past comment swap?

Usually, I don't read poetry and this was definitely not what I had in mind when I did the comment swap. But! I have to say this is great. In so little words, you described what most people can't. And it's also something a lot of people can relate to.

@ polka
Alhamdullilah. I'm glad you like it, it means so much that you enjoyed it bestie.

I did make two girls cry with this story... I hope that you're okay. I'm a little worried about that. :P

Wow, I really hope I did all that, it sounds more exciting the way you describe it :)

Jazakallah Khair for reading!

Oh my goodness... This was poetry. Pure and simple. It was absolutely beautiful. And I was just riveted. Seriously. It was just... Beautiful :) and I loved how honest it was. And I loved the message and how you sort of dipped into her head but still kept the story moving along. You didn't over-do either of them. It was absolutely brilliant!

@ Jim Moriarty

I'm really glad you like this story! And that you think it's poetic. I wrote a new story called Sickness, it's also got that same kind of style (I hope) hahaha. Sometimes I don't realize how much I flow. I'm glad that it happened this time.

@ Sweetest Insanity
That's really something to be proud of actually. I had my TA(teacher's assistant) edit one of my assignments that I handed in...I could've gotten perfect if I had read it over a few times to get the grammar right. A precious skill that can help you articulate yourself. :)

I plan on using the world wide web to get some of that literary skill going. Your love has inspired me. *drops fake tears into eyes* One day, I'll love grammar just as much as you. (is there something grammatically incorrect with this last sentence?)

Well, I'm not sure why I love grammar so much. Once I started writing, it just clicked, so now i'm all about grammar for some reason xD I don't know any resources off the top of my head for you, but you could definitely use google to see if you can find some yourself!

@ Mizzie
I used to like grammar until highschool. I have no idea what happened. Maybe too much time with writing websites and poorly written works. It's time to change for sure. What drives your grammar love? Do you have any resources for me to improve mine? I am willing to improve my dying first language... With your help it will be much easier.

If you need any help, feel free to ask! I'm a real grammar freak, and though I'm only in the 10th grade and I don't know everything by a long shot, I like to think I'm pretty well off. English is a hard language to go through for those who live with it, so I can't imagine what it's like for others! And no problem; like I told you, I'm always up to try something new to read :)

@ Mizzie I knew my grammar and English skills were getting bad since I got to university... They don't teach writing as much... So it's really helpful that you told me about this. Ill have to look into learning some stuff again. Thank you for checking this out.

Hey, I'm here commenting cause I read this like you asked :) I have to say, I was very intrigued by the idea of the story and the plot behind it (I stopped to comment after chapter 1). Since you asked me to read this though, I feel like I should leave a few suggestions, and by all means, you really don't have to listen to them if you don't want to! I know I don't like when someone bashes on my writing style, so I'm not going to do that to you! Like I said, you have a lot going for this story, but as far as grammar, well, it needs a little work. If you have microsoft word available, its a good place to start. I didn't notice any spelling mistakes, so don't worry there, but it will catch grammar mistakes. That's why I love it ^-^ Anyway....you have run on sentences sometimes, and this may be a personal thing, I really don't know, but I find it a bit hard to read...and you switch between present tense and past tnese, which is also kind of confusing. I see narrative, where it would need to be past, but while you're doing that, I would suggest trying to minimize current thoughts that would switch back into present. Besides those couple of minor things, you've really got a good story going on here, I wish you luck in future writings!!

@ The Authoress
I can't believe I wrote this. It's so lovey dovey!! And at the same time it's not. I'm getting nervous thinking about tomorrow. School is so nerve shaking. Omg omg omg omg. Ya Allah please help me.

@ popular mechanics.
Commas are very hard for me to understand. Thanks, I wouldn't have otherwise noticed. I remember you commented on my other story before "Polish of the Heart" I removed it now though. Thanks for the comments earlier and now!

I heard if you read good writing you will get better at writing :D

I recently found this short book: http://www.scribd.com/doc/99919622/The-Man-in-the-Red-Underpants-by-One-Reason

@ moriartily
I'm glad you feel something for it. How does it make you feel? Because I was really thinking about emotions while I wrote it, so I would love to know your thoughts.

@ FloatingInThePast
Wow, thank you. I'm glad you enjoyed it. Different reading is always interesting, yeah? That's why I love "My Fair Princess" a story on mibba.

My friend also suggested a book to me recently. The writing style is unique and its such a short book. I convinced her to let me keep it because the title was hilarious. Lol, I found it online, you can check it out too: http://www.scribd.com/doc/99919622/The-Man-in-the-Red-Underpants-by-One-Reason

from comment swap! i love the way you wrote this, your style flows so nicely. your description is great, but sometimes you're grammar is a little off (a few commas here and there). Just little things that can easily be fixed. Love how you wrote this, though. I'll definitely rec!

From comment swap.
I just absolutely love this. I adore how poetic is sounds, and it flows perfectly. The plot is amazing, and it's not run of the mill as well, which I just love, alright. Great job. I'll be finishing this for sure!